议论文试笔及评改

    
I．下面推荐一篇论述体育运动重要性的议论文，请同学们欣赏：


Some of us regard sport as something joyful but I believe we often take part in outdoor activities not only for fun．Sport is highly important for us youth．


It is said that good health is above wealth．Sport can build up our bodies and keep us healthy．It gives us valuable practice in helping our eyes，brains and muscles to work together．This is of great importance to those who work with their brains most of the day．


In school，we spend most of the time on our lessons，so sport is a necessary part of life．In fact，sport can improve our ability to study instead of having a bad effect on us．After one or two hour sport every day，we may feel our brains work faster．


Sport is so usefuland we must take an active part in it．


点评：上面这篇论述体育运动重要性的议论文，总体说来，写得比较成功。该文符合英语议论文的基本格式，提出了自己对体育运动重要性的看法，明确表示赞成、支持青年学生经常从事体育运动。该文做到了观点统率材料，材料证明观点。


该文层次清楚。正文一开头便针对一些人的错误观点（Some of us regard sport as something joyful），鲜明地提出了自己的观点：Sport is highly important for us youth．


正文第二段以一句经典名言（Good health is above wealth．）作为理论依据证明上述论点的正确性。同时，科学地阐述了体育运动对从事脑力劳动的人的重要性。


正文第三段结合学生的实际情况，进一步阐述了体育运动不仅不会影响学生学习，反而可以提高学习效率。


正文最后一段作者明确地推出了自己的结论：Sport is so useful and we must take an active part in it．


II．请根据以下要点写一篇有关英语学习的议论文。


1）论点：在使用中学习英语。


2）论据：一个人从练习游泳中才能学会游泳。


有位名人说：To study English without trying to speak it is not advisable．


谚语：God helps those who help themselves．


3）论证：从听、说、读、写四个方面进行论述。


4）结论：熟能生巧（Practice makes perfect．）。


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Many of us are learning English but how can we improve it？As we know，one learns to swim by swimming．We can also learn English by using English．


An expert on English says that to study English without trying to speak it is not advisable．In fact，if you hope to speak English fluently ，you should speak it every day，wherever possible．If you have nobody to speak to，you can talk to yourself．God helps those who help themselves．


It is the same with listening，reading and writing．In school，you can listen to your teacher or classmates speaking English．You can listen to English tapes at home．At the same time，you should read English books．Often do some reading aloud in class or out of class．Writing English is also important．Keep a diary and write more to your classmates or friends in English．


Practice makes perfect．Don't be afraid of making mistakes in using English．If you learn English by using it constantly，you'll improve your English greatly and rapidly．